The Best One
Have you ever want to buy something that you like it, but you confused to choose only one. No matter how much have money, if the things that you want too much, it seem you cannot buy all of it. I had an experience when my friend wanted to choose only one new brand of laptop that he needed. He had already known about what would he want to buy, but he just want to make it sure to buy it. He was confused to choose a laptop which one is better for him because he had no much money. Giving suggestion or asking someone to choose which one is better is very useful to give him more careful in choosing goods, no matter how much that cost depends on his budget that he has and quality of that brands.
When I saw him, I asked to him what happened. He just said
“nothing” but I saw him had a problem. And then he said to me that he wanted to
buy a new laptop but he did not have enough money to buy the expensive one, so I
asked him to buy a new one with the same function and same quality as expensive
one. For budget that’s enough with his own money to pay it. He really like
gaming and designing, so I asked him to buy the one which have game and design application
and also have good performance to support it. I really want to make him getting
the best one based on his budget that he has. He also got the best one and
useful based on what he needed.
After I gave the solution, he decided to buy the new one
with the same features like the expensive one, but it was cheaper than the one
that they wanted. I guess him to handle with care for make the laptop better
condition in using it. He was so happy having that laptop because it’s same
quality with the expensive one even better. He just say thank you to me because
he really want to get the application like what the other friends have.
Finally, he got the best one and that was very nice when I
see the characteristics of this laptop and that is have many strength on this
laptop. Now he knew about what the strength and weaknesses from that laptop. We
as a person should choose the best one that we can buy and we needed in our
daily life. Don’t ever use prices or the expensive to judge that have better or
best than the cheaper one that we can get, but see the feature and we can
compare with the other if we wanted to get the best.
hi ery indrawan "innocent face" wkwk..
ReplyDeleteafter reading your writing. i think the organization in your writing is quite good. however, you should consider the rule of grammar, example : in paragraph 1 "it seem" should become "it seems" and there is some other about vocabulary. i think that's all....good job ery. still do your best...^_^
Hello Ery. your writing is good and the word that you use is easy to understand. My advice is if you want to make theses statement it should be clear and make the people that read your writing understand the meaning of your theses statement because it's will make your writing more interesting.
ReplyDeleteYou are a good person, you help your friend to find brand of laptop that he needed.
Thank you very much :D
Ery,
ReplyDeleteAre you in hurry when you wrote this essay?
I think you have to be more careful later because I found slight mistakes such as: "that is have", "many strength" but over all your writing is good :)
I do agree with your view point in buying something. There are some consideration to choose the best one starting from quality, requirement, function, and budged that we have.
I think your friend is very satisfied because you can give him a nice suggestion .
Hi Ery, I like your writing. I have some suggestions for you. First, you have to be more careful in using conjunction. Second, a complex sentence can make your writing become confusing. You have to think about it again. I think that is all.
ReplyDeleteCheers
Yura :)
In the first paragraph, you wrote "...very useful to give him more careful in choosing goods...". I think it should be "... very useful to make him more careful..."
ReplyDeleteYou need to improve your skill in choosing an appropriate word or grammatically correct sentence because some of your sentences are not good.
You need to be careful in using the verb based on the subject.
Somehow, I agree with you that we need to examine and take a look for something beyond its cover or its cost.
Nice writing, Ery :)